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January 31, 2013

I’d love for you to read my Valentine’s script and give me some notes!

“Fifty Kisses.” Think about it.

I just couldn’t resist entering this contest because it felt like the perfect challenge for this love doctor, who also happens to be a closeted screenwriter.

The task: To write a complete screenplay, in no more than two pages, with a valentine’s theme. Somewhere, there had to be a kiss.

Perfect, I thought.

When I made it passed the first competitive round. I was thrilled. Really, I was. But I still wish I had won the whole thing.

My script is called:

THE VALENTINE’S CAR BURGLAR

EXT. PARKING LOT – DAY
Outdoor dining area, adjacent to parking lot in front of a cafe, filled with patrons. There are more bicycles than cars, in the lot.
TYLER, 55, bald, leaves donut shop with his coffee.
TEEN AGE EMPLOYEE, 17, in Valentine costume, with bright red exaggerated lips, gives Tyler a chocolate kiss from her basket.
TYLER Thanks, honey.
Two black Lexus sedans, identical to his, are in the parking lot. He heads to his own, on the other side of the lot.
WOMAN. 40, attractive, is sitting in his driver’s seat. ANOTHER WOMAN, 40, sits next to her in the passenger seat.
The Woman pushes the “keyless” ignition button. The car won’t start. Tyler and the key in his pocket are too far away.
TYLER (CONT’D) What the hell?
Tyler, closer to his car, walks to the back and checks the license plates. His voice gets loud.
TYLER (CONT’D)
Damn them. THAT’S MY CAR. MY DOG.
LADIES.
His engine turns over.
The woman blows his horn. Tyler screams; the car speeds away.
TYLER (CONT’D)
STOP. STOP. They’ve kidnapped my
dog. Those are no ladies. HELP. Call the cops. Someone.
The car is out of sight.
INT. CAR – DAY
Woman turns on CD player. Patsy Cline sings.
WOMAN Nashville rocks.
ANOTHER WOMAN
I’m glad you didn’t hit that guy.
WOMAN
He was bald. I like “bald.”
ANOTHER WOMAN
He was trying to talk to you.
WOMAN No kidding?
A DOG in the back seat starts to yelp. The women turn in horror.
ANOTHER WOMAN Somebody left a dog in your car.
EXT. PARKING LOT – DAY
POLICEMAN, 25, questions Tyler, as the women reappear. Spot is in the Woman’s arms. Tyler runs and reclaims his dog thru the window of his car.
The two women exit the car. A crowd watches.
WOMAN
It was a mistake. Really. Look. My
car’s the same as yours. Exactly.
She points to her own car as Tyler smooches with the dog.
TYLER
Except for “Spot.” And the spoiler.
It’s okay, Officer.
WOMAN
We listen to the same music.
TYLER Patsy Cline?
Spot jumps out of Tyler’s arms and runs to the Woman. The Woman bends down to pet Spot and Spot licks her face.
WOMAN
I was nice to him.

If you’ve read this: Thank you.

And please remember: Love is like the sunshine; there is enough to go around for everyone.


Thanks For Visiting,

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